the Ginger Cat
Slytherin!
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James Potter died the night Voldemort attacked Godric's Hollow. Lily Potter nee Evans and her son Harry didn't. Eleven years after her husbands death, Lily learns that she's gravely ill. Can Harry find a way to save his mother? And can Lily convince a certain potions master to look past her son's appearance?
Takes Place: 3rd summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by dancingkatz
Rated: T
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Warnings: Character Death, Profanity
Chapters: 4 - Completed: No - Updated: 04 Aug 2008 / 29 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 4 - Completed: No - Updated: 04 Aug 2008 / 29 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter one | 04 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- An excellent beginning! And I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors at all. The conversation between Lily and Albus was most excellently written.
I think you were spot on as to the people the Ministry would have picked for Harry's guardians if anything happens to Lily. I suspect that in the end Lucius, the blackguard, would have his hands on Harry because he owns the Ministry and he could completely manipulate the Dursleys into turning Harry over to him (or even kill them and take the boy if he was impatient). Definitely not something that anyone on the side of the good guys want to have happen.
Ron was amusing and you got his voice exactly right; his irritation with Hermione was perfectly drawn.
Hermione was... well she was Hermione and this probably starts out as one of her more enjoyable to trips to Hogwarts for her since she has Flitwick to talk to about all the things that the boys don't want to hear about. Of course, I suspect the trip won't stay enjoyable with that hint about Deatheaters planning to attack the train.
You also avoided one of my pet peeves in fic-writing: the laundry list description of everything and anything. Instead you very successfully let the characters create the atmosphere and have control of hte story. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you! I am very happy people are likeing my story. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well.
| Title: Chapter 2: Chapter two | 04 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- I liked this chapter as much as I liked hte first one. Don't worry about a chapter being short or long or the fact that there's not a big climax or tons of action. Stories need quieter sections where things develop as much as they need the BIG stuff. I just wanted to give Harry ahug when I read his letter to his Mum.
Some constructive criticism:
You wrote: "Yes actually." Hermione had a thoughtfull look. "I also noticed that he seemed concerned when you mentioned your mom."
You missed a comma, had a mispelling and used an Americanism. The missed comma is likely just a typo as is the mispelling but you might want to visit the Harry Potter Lexicon website and look at the section on British slang and colloquialisms. I would have written the sentence like so:
"Yes, actually," Hermione reflected with a thoughtful look. "I also noticed that he seemed concerned when you mentioned your Mum."
"Mum" is the British version whilst "Mom" is the American version.
The only other typo I noticed was "barring" instead of "bearing" in your final paragraph. I'd have connected the second sentence to the first one with a comma or semicolon rather than leave the sentence fragment but it didn't really jar me out of the story. Despite English teachers sentence fragments can be used in certain circumstances. It's more a matter of taste in this instance.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you! As I said in the begining, I greatly appreciate any constructive criticism. So thank you very much for your input. But I have to say again; spelling and grammer are not my best strengths. So there will most likely, if not definatley, be more errors in the future. I appologize for that. I have never heard of the 'Harry Potter Lexicon website'. Sorry if I somehow missed it. And I will appologize now for any more Americanism. I'll work on that. Thank you very much again, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
| Title: Chapter 3: Chapter three | 04 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Oh, no! Leukemia is such a horrible disease! Poor Lily! But if there's anyone in the wizarding world with the smarts to find a wizarding cure for it, it will be Severus.
You handled this entire scene beautifully. Lily's reactions, Severus's reactions, everything.
If I was Sev I think I'd be perfectly speechless with shock at hearing Lily's last word. I wonder if I'm right?
I'm on to the next chapter to find out. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you!
| Title: Chapter 4: Chapter four | 04 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Well, I partially right, Sev was silent for all of three seconds and then blew up. Nicely done, especially Harry and Ron's reactions to Lily's note. I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you!
On that fateful night that Voldemort tried to kill Harry Potter, one man lost the object of his affections but gained a family member.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Baby fic, Child fic, Deaging
Categories: Big Brother Snape
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Baby fic, Child fic, Deaging
Categories: Big Brother Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 10 - Completed: No - Updated: 21 Mar 2010 / 02 Jul 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 10 - Completed: No - Updated: 21 Mar 2010 / 02 Jul 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: The Loss of a Loved One | 03 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- A lovely and heartbreaking beginning. I look forward to reading more of this story.
Prequel to Never Again. After the death of her husband, Lily Potter must begin her life anew, along with her son, Harry. Can they find comfort and solace with Master Healer Severus Snape? Or will old wounds from past and present keep them apart?
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Stepfather Snape, Healer Snape
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Stepfather Snape, Healer Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Character Death, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Romance/Het, Violence
Chapters: 31 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 29 Nov 2008 / 03 Jul 2008
Series: Never Again! - Challenges: None
Chapters: 31 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 29 Nov 2008 / 03 Jul 2008
Series: Never Again! - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 7: Never Second Best | 07 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Oh, poor Molly. Well, at least we know she has the little girl she and Arthur have always wanted. And Ron's predicament made me remember when one of my cousins did the same thing one Saturday at my grandma's house. Oh, the ruckus that caused!
And then there is Sev. Poor man, he really has some serious self-esteem issues, doesn't he? Well, Lily will get those cleared up pretty darn quick, I suspect. I loved the entire conversation and argument at the bachelor's dinner party and just thinking about Molly's cinnamon buns has me looking at the clock and groaning because there isn't anywhere within a reasonable distance that is open at this hour that has really good cinnamon buns. I know what I'm having for breakfast tomorrow....
Excellently done (as usual!)
Author's Response:
Oh boy! looks like that's a favorite of a lot of children, including my sister and my nephew. Only they shoved beads and a penny up their nose, LOL! And yes, Sev's self-esteem is quite damaged, both from Tobias and from playing second fiddle to James. Lily will be able to help him a lot with that, however.
And now I'm hungry for cinnamon buns too! Argghh!
| Title: Chapter 9: Frost Faire | 29 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Aaaaauuuugggggghhhhhhh! You can't leave us hanging there! Please, please, please don't let anything happen to Severus!
Very well written. I loved the descriptions of the Frost Faire and Harry's snowman was just adorable.
Author's Response: Don't worry, I just posted the follow-up chapter! So go and read it! Glad you liked my Frost Faire, it's really based on an actual event that I described via Severus.
| Title: Chapter 29: A Last Special Gift | 27 Nov 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- I more than liked this. Yes, I had the tissues handy because I needed them but even though it is sad, it is also beautiful seeing how Lily is handling things and how even at the end of her strength her thoughts are all for those she loves. You are a wonderful writer and I am reminded of that every time I read another chapter of your work.
Happy Thanksgiving!
Author's Response:
Happy Thanksgiving too, if you celebrate it.
Lily is, even at the last, a sweet and generous woman, who loves others more than herself. But God, this was difficult to write.
Young Harry Potter is in need of some proper discipline and Professor Dumbledore thinks he has just the man to do it. Set after Philosopher’s Stone and spans the rest of Chamber of Secrets. AU
Takes Place: 3rd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Takes Place: 3rd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Jul 2008 / 06 Jul 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Jul 2008 / 06 Jul 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Prologue - A Night to Remember | 07 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- An interesting and well-written beginning. I look forwardto seeing how this develops.
Sometimes getting what you want is terrifying. Can Severus and Harry manage after the roller coaster that was first year?
Sequel to Reading the Signs.
Takes Place: 3rd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Sequel to Reading the Signs.
Takes Place: 3rd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 15 - Completed: No - Updated: 14 Feb 2011 / 07 Jul 2008
Series: Going Through the Motions - Challenges: None
Chapters: 15 - Completed: No - Updated: 14 Feb 2011 / 07 Jul 2008
Series: Going Through the Motions - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 | 08 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- I was so happy to see this chapter. an intriguing beginning and I can hardly wait for more. I so enjoyed "Reading the Signs" and this looks like it will be just as good, if not better. Bravo!
Author's Response: It's good to know that you find the first chapter intriguing. That's always the hardest bit ;) Thanks for reviewing.