I just wanted to say thank you for the story so far and alas, this is where we part ways as they say.

I enjoyed the chapters written so far, and some of the ideas/concepts you had introduced were new and thusly very interesting and a pleasure to read. Although I had my qualms with some things added, like Harry being the supplement teacher, over all it was very well written and interesting in it’s newness.

I am parting ways with the story simply because you have lost me twice now in the stories believability and that’s it I am afraid. First of all, to me there is nothing more important than a story that sounds real, believable, and that concerning not canon but human nature. The first event was when Harry gave up his father’s cloak, the second this Hermione/Ron incident – both are so far away from something that would fit human psychology and real events that they simply ruin the story. And by real events I mean events that come from human reactions and actions which have nothing to do with the genre of the story  being written – human nature and psychology are what they are.

It would not have been such a stretch if Harry was asked to give up his cloak by let’s say Dumbledore as a punishment, or Minerva but in the setting that you made here, to give it up to Draco Malfoy during this punishment (which is also on the very edge of believability but can be somewhat justified) is a complete overkill. I can think of dozens of reasons why he would never do that but the most important one of course is that it is his dead father’s cloak, the father who was killed by Voldemort and DE’s, and to give it to a son of a known DE? Never. Also the argument with Ron and Hermy is in the same category of – will never happen for that reason. They faced death together and while friends can part ways some things will always keep them tied till they die, so this again is anything but believable or in my mind a plot moving event which is not good. To use Azkaban or the threat of it as an excuse of why he did it is also not believable, you yourself provided a reason why in the earlier chapters. Adding drama to a story with believable events is important because otherwise the story looses.

Amway, best of luck with this and all other stories. Just because I do not like it doesn’t mean others won’t enjoy it very much. And thanks for the part written thus far, it was enjoyable really.