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Reviews by Kitsune-chan
By third year, Harry was starting to think he knew his own identity. Then, the discovery of an old secret threatens to throw his world into turmoil, yet again. Nor is he the only one who finds his life affected...
Who is he, anyway? Takes Place: 3rd Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Loving, Snape is Stern Tags: Alternate Universe, Physical Impairment, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Alcohol Use, Neglect, Profanity
Chapters: 39 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 15 Sep 2015 / 04 Mar 2010 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: Ah, yes... I'm getting there. >.< Lotsa distractions. Darkness swallowed Severus's childhood and is threatening to engulf Harry's. Will the man recognize himself in the boy before history repeats itself? [Generally short chapters due to (almost) daily updates]
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None Tags: Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Death, Profanity
Chapters: 60 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 May 2010 / 07 Mar 2010 Series: Ship to Shore - Challenges: None
The revenge thing by a teacher (especially Severus) is a bit overdone, although you're doing it well and giving it some twists of your own. Still, could stand to be... individualized more. One little nitpicky thing (I'm really pedantic about factual stuff): in the year 1000, they wouldn't have been using Middle English yet; instead, they would have been speaking Old English (Anglo-Saxon), which was an entirely different language, not yet having been influenced by a dialect of Old French called Anglo-Norman (also had added a lot of German influences). Salazar's manuscript would have had to have been translated sometime after 1100, when Middle English started developing after the Norman conquest; preferably, late fourteenth century (vaguely intelligible at that point). (Information from a website on the history of the English language) Wow, I'm -really- prone to prattle on, aren't I? Sorry for the super-long review, but succintness is not my forte by a long shot (unless I'm trying to write long essays, in which case my brain only ever supplies the most concise way of wording something. Stupid brain). Anyways,keep up the good work! (My nit-picking aside) Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I know that my Vernon is rather 'Alternate Universe' but I really wanted to mirror Severus and Harry's lives. As for Slytherin's book, I have the problem that, if I wrote in actual Anglo-Saxon, I'd have to spend a couple of hours on the translation and then add huge long paragraphs in the End Notes, translating it back into Modern English. And then there is also the fact that Slytherin's phrasology, I feel, adds charm to his writings (which, if I used Old English, would be lost to any reader who couldn't understand Anglo-Saxon.) Therefore, I've compromised by germanic words (and spellings) where I can and throwing in the odd bit of Old Norse or Latin. Sometimes one needs to find a balence between authenticity and practicality. P.S. I have a BA in English Literature and I specialised in Old English ;)
Anyways, good chapter! Author's Response: Thanks for the review ^^. Severus's hair-cut is mentioned in the first paragraph of chapter 12; as he's impersonating a police-officer, he needs to look fairly smart. (Though I'm thinking more a floppy 'Col. Brandon' type hairstyle than a crew-cut!) Don't worry, though, it'll have been regrown by the next morning! I forgot to add something in my answer to your last review; if you like individual, original plots, you might enjoy my other fic 'Harry Potter and the Order of the Pegasus'. It started out as an intellectual experiment; I wanted to see to see if I could weave an alternative universe- starting at the point when Harry and Cedric take the Goblet of Fire- where Voldemort is actually the hero rather than the villain. As I managed to think up a scenario which would do this (whilst remaining true to Harry's perception of events in books one to five) I decided to give the fic a chance. As I said, it is experimental- not to mention Kafka-esque- but I think it works.
Wonder what Draco and Blaise were whispering about (Sorry my review isn't more coherent; I'm kinda half asleep atm) Do you have this prewritten or something? Because your update schedule's really, really fast... Author's Response: No, I don't pre-write: I release each chapter pretty much the moment it's ready. Mind you, I did dream up the plot around a month ago, so the actual writing part doesn't take incredibly long: an just an hour to writing and an hour to do proof-reading/editing. (I'm dyslexic so my spelling's appauling and I do occasionally have a brain-burp and write 'check' instead of 'cheque' or 'piece' instead of 'peace': I know the difference b Blaise and Draco were talking about Harry but not in the way he imagined; they realised that Harry was suffering and were comparing notes/ trying to work out how to help their best friend. She wants a child. He needs a mother. But somehow, it's never that simple. A response to ObsidianEmbrace's "Mother Bella" challenge.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None Tags: Baby fic, Kidnapped Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Torture, Violence
Chapters: 3 - Completed: No - Updated: 19 Mar 2010 / 17 Mar 2010 Series: None - Challenges: Mother Bella
Reading the first person style's a bit weird (I just never really read it, so it takes some getting used to), but I like your Bellatrix, and how you show her thought processes Author's Response: I'm glad to hear that you don't think set-up is a waste of time! I know there are people who are disappointed that we don't meet Harry or Snape until a few chapters in. I'm also glad that you don't find my Bellatrix too much of a turn-off as a narrator, because she's kind of crazy and murderous. I was afraid the audience might get sick of her. Thanks for reviewing! Everyone seems to have forgotten that the Boy-Who-Lived exists. Harry's friends don't remember who he is. It's a struggle for Harry to hold on to reality as he knows it, while at the same time coming to terms with who he really is. He finds Snape an unexpected ally in the struggle that ensues to reclaim his identity. 6th year AU. (Harry is gay)
Takes Place: 6th Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Alcohol Use, Neglect, Profanity, Romance/Slash
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 25 Nov 2011 / 19 Oct 2010 Series: None - Challenges: None
Nightmares at night have kept Harry awake for so long that he can no longer keep his eyes open during class. Potions Master Severus Snape is determined to teach the sixth year some respect.
In response to the ‘Sleeping During Class’ challenge by Jan_AQ. Takes Place: 6th Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Angry, Canon Snape, Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Snape is Mean, Snape is Stern Tags: Adoption, Injured!Harry Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Snape Equal Status to Harry > Foes Snape and Harry, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Physical Punishment Non-Spanking, Profanity, Romance/Het, Violence
Chapters: 14 - Completed: No - Updated: 23 May 2012 / 28 Nov 2010 Series: None - Challenges: Sleeping During Class
Author's Response: Yeah, it was meant to be awkward in the office. Thanks for the review. When Harry goes back to school the year after Sirius dies, the unlikeliest of people start noticing a change in him. Revelations, new friendships and more brushes with death.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Rape, Violence
Chapters: 13 - Completed: No - Updated: 25 Jun 2012 / 31 Dec 2010 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: The new chapter is up now :)
Rather than allowing Harry to stay at Diagon Alley after he blew up Aunt Marge, the Ministry sends Harry back to the Dursleys. Harry returns to school after a terrible summer, to find that he's not the only one with this kind of secret. A student has been killed by his family. New screening measures are put into place by the Ministry: Every student must be given a medical exam and interview to look for child abuse. With Dumbledore facing an inquiry, Snape is entrusted with the task of making sure EVERYONE receives one.
Takes Place: 3rd Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Death, Neglect, Self-harm, Suicide Themes, Violence
Chapters: 62 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Nov 2014 / 24 Feb 2011 Series: None - Challenges: New Measures for Screening Abuse
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