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Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
| 22 Jun 2012
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Reviewer: Infinity Ltd (Signed)
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Just read your story through to this point. Your character development is great, and you build a very strong sense of anticipation. My one suggestion is that I'd be more sympathetic to your version of Harry if he had a few more positive attributes. It's hard to feel sympathy for his position if he is being a jerk. Great story though- I'm really enjoying it!
Author's Response: Canon Harry can be an arrogant, disobedient, rude, lazy, bad tempered, stubborn, uncooperative little rule-breaker. He leaps to conclusions and he is dismissive of adults who have greater knowledge and experience because he thinks he knows better. Until the bitter end, he continues to divide people into good and evil based on whether they're NICE to him. He shows almost no ability to change his mind about people he doesn't like. I'm not sure what positive qualities he would display under the circumstances (high stress, being kept from doing what he wants, etc.). It would be nice for Harry to be a more sympathetic character, because people might start to treat him better. Although that sounds a bit like victim-blaming, because they should be treating him better no matter how he's acting. It might also be a tall order because some of his good qualities are precisely the things Snape doesn't like about him and/or can get him and his friends killed right now.
Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Chapter 17: Postscript
| 26 May 2011
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Reviewer: Infinity Ltd (Signed)
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One of the best hurt/comfort genre. Truly memorable.
Eleven year old Harry Potter is not the boy everyone expects him to be. Unpopular, picked on, and unable to perform magic correctly most of the time because of a stutter, Harry is the boy nobody wants to be around. What happens when Severus Snape, the Potions Master currently spear heading the anti-Potter party, gets a glimpse of the boy’s true personality and inner workings?
Takes Place: 1st Year
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Snape flavour: Canon Snape, Snape is Cruel, Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Snape is Mean, Snape is Secretive
Tags: Adoption, Injured!Harry, Physical Impairment, Runaway
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Title: Chapter 11: Hagrid's Pets
| 16 Apr 2011
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Reviewer: Infinity Ltd (Signed)
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Love this story - read it through again today. Well developed... Hope you continue it.
When he can no longer stand the half-truths and whole lies, Harry seeks out the truth in an epic journey that will change his outlook on life forever. “Tell me… tell me please.”
Takes Place: 5th Year
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Snape flavour: Snape is Angry, Canon Snape, Snape Comforts, Snape is Controlling, Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Snape is Mean, Snape is Secretive
Tags: Amnesia, Spying!Harry, Time Travel
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape, Misc > No category on the site fits, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry
Title: Chapter 7: Past Tense
| 25 Apr 2011
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Reviewer: Infinity Ltd (Signed)
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Great chapter. Thanks for posting!
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