Slytherin!
Rather than allowing Harry to stay at Diagon Alley after he blew up Aunt Marge, the Ministry sends Harry back to the Dursleys. Harry returns to school after a terrible summer, to find that he's not the only one with this kind of secret. A student has been killed by his family. New screening measures are put into place by the Ministry: Every student must be given a medical exam and interview to look for child abuse. With Dumbledore facing an inquiry, Snape is entrusted with the task of making sure EVERYONE receives one.
Takes Place: 3rd Year
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Slythering Potter
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Death, Neglect, Self-harm, Suicide Themes, Violence
Chapters: 62 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Nov 2014 / 24 Feb 2011
Series: None - Challenges: New Measures for Screening Abuse
Chapters: 62 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Nov 2014 / 24 Feb 2011
Series: None - Challenges: New Measures for Screening Abuse
| Title: Chapter 37: The Storyteller | 16 Nov 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- That. Was almost unbearably sweet, and incredibly painful. This is one of my favorite chapters of yours for this story.
Seriously.
While there isn't really any action, it tugs on the emotions. Especially when you take into account the situation and previous incidents. I've never seen Snape to tender, but it works! Works because of what had happened, and how you don't actually use his name.
It's fantastic!
At the beginning of Fifth Year, Harry continues to be get detentions with Umbridge and her awful quill, and now he's getting sicker and sicker. Afraid he won't be believed, he refuses to go to the staff for help. Will anyone take notice before things go too far?
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 07 Mar 2011 / 07 Mar 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Infection from a blood quill
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 07 Mar 2011 / 07 Mar 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Infection from a blood quill
| Title: Chapter 1: Agony of the Written Word | 02 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- That was fantastic! I greatly admire your description of the injury upon his hand, the detail of the puss and coloration - which, seems to strike me as the description of blood poisoning. I also love the way you portrayed Severus Snape. Every bit as vindictive as he was in the book. Umbridge too though, she seemed particularly foul here.
I am excited to see how the chaos will unfold, and the after-effects of the detention. Breathless, I wait for the next chapter.
--Alis Syn
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All he knew was that the sound of a soothing voice, the gentle rocking of the chair, and the weight in his arms were the only things that mattered, all that he had left.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Misc > All written in Snape's POV, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Misc > All written in Snape's POV, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 May 2011 / 06 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Snape finds Harry first
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 May 2011 / 06 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Snape finds Harry first
| Title: Chapter 1: All That He Had Left | 08 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- So short! I love it though. I like your style a lot. I like how you really dive into Snape's head, show us his thinking process.
And, while Snape would never admit it, it's wholly possible that he actually did that.
-Alis Syn
After an incident at the Dursley's, Harry finds he needs help. Will this be the catalyst for two unlikely characters forming a respectful relationship between one another, or are we kidding ourselves that one of the two can ever overcome his bitterness..
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Misc
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Misc
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 9 - Completed: No - Updated: 02 Jun 2011 / 16 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 9 - Completed: No - Updated: 02 Jun 2011 / 16 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Famished | 31 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- You can't just stop there! I was getting so into it! :P
I cannot wait for the next chapter! Is Harry having a Nightmare? Strange, that he's calling for Severus then... but it'd be wonderful all the same. Shows Harry trusts him, to some extent anyway.
Author's Response:
Sorry... he, he... not!
;)
I shall not comment on the rest... :p
misundersnape...
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Reckless | 18 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- I am dying to know what happens next! Truly, I am sitting on the edge of my seat praying that you’ll be updating this story quickly – and if you need a Beta in order to make that happen know that I am there!
Alright, onto the actual review.
The beginning felt a little awkward. There were a few grammatical and spelling errors – site when it should have been sight but nothing that detracts too much from the story. But as it went on the awkwardness went away, and it got more and more exciting. When Uncle Vernon handed him the pot it reached full stride and I sped through to the end, needing to know what happened next.
I really like the idea and your portrayal of the Dursleys. They seem to remain more true to their book personalities – meaning not overly abusive (though that element is not bad either). It’s just interesting, and I love Harry’s desire to have food, the necessities as it were, is what finally pushed him over the edge. Personally I would have had Uncle Vernon toss him out of the kitchen, and I would have given him a stomach wound. Wouldn’t have nicked anything of course, but there’s something more serious when you’re slugged in the gut. But, using his wand arm… could make for some really fun plot issues later on…. Hm…
For how much he was bleeding, I’m not sure about the likelihood of him reawaking on the street. That was the only real thing that bugged me. The way you described it, it seemed as though his uncle had nicked an artery – nicked, not severed – and as it seemed his attempts to stop the flow were rather fruitless… he would have bleed out. Perhaps sending the patronus and then passing out would have been better.
Author's Response:
Hi!
Thanks for this review!
I'm not really sure what you meant by the beginning feels awkward... I re-read that part with your comment in mind, but I still am not sure what you meant, it seemed okay to me. So, if you could be more specific, I'll be happy to reassess that part.
Yes, the odd typo and mistake will be expected - i don't use a beta and I have a couple of versions of this - and sometimes an error might be fixed on one version, but not the other... and words like site versus sight are particularly difficult to catch, as spell check is of no use there lol. ;) Anyway, one day I'll get to catching them all.
I tried to go for a realistic approach and view of all the characters, so I'm glad you found them believable and true to canon. However, I think it's Harry's desire for 'luxuries' that he isn't getting, that he sees Dudley in particular getting, that finally pushes him over the edge. He's getting fed, housed, clothed already, so his necessities are being catered to.
I didn't go for a more serious wound because I wanted Harry to take his time getting help. I wanted him to think he had time to avoid alerting the ministry etc... so could walk away. Plus there are a variety of plot reason I wanted him away for the Dursleys.
Vernon's knife wound is fairly superficial. Deep, but it hasn't hit anything major. Harry bleeds quite a lot, but not life threatening... though because it is a clean cut it does have trouble clotting properly - especially when he exerts the limb the bleeding does recommence. So I think passing out, then re-awakening is possible, and for plot reasons I wanted it that way. I did put thought into it when I wrote it, with the ideas your brought up in mind actually, but in the end I decided quite deliberately that this is the way I wanted it. So thanks for your comments, they were appreciated and valid nonetheless.
Thanks so much for your review!
misundersnape...
| Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Surely not...? | 19 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- LOL!
Harry's reaction at the end. Priceless.
Author's Response:
Glad you approve! :D
Thanks!
misundernsape...
| Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Puzzle | 21 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- I think this is your best chapter so far!
In response to your response - Haha, I love the repetition of that - when I said that it felt awkward in the beginning...hm... perhaps awkward was the wrong word for it. It's like, the beginning of both the first and second chapter felt rather squeezed of description, kind of rushed. The diction felt slightly stiff.
Kinda make sense?
However, this chapter was wonderful! It didn't have that all! It was much better, and oh so fun to read. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Okay, I understand better what you meant and I'll go over the beginnings of both chaps with that issue in mind and see what I can improve. Thanks for getting back to me.
I'm so glad this one was better in your eyes, and am happy to hear you enjoyed it!
misundersnape...
| Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Trust and Truth | 26 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- Very nice! Sorry I didn't review the last one, didn't have time amid all the end of year school hysteria!
Anyway, while the chapter was very short - and had no Snape/Harry interaction - I really liked it. I also like how you made Dumbledore not an enemy in this - meaning that, he didn't know about the abuse etc. Stories wherein he is aware of it and ignores it bothers me, he doesn't strike me as the type, but I do like how he was a little angry, but skeptical at the same time.
It felt... realistic.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Oh, you didn't reveiw - *jabs finger back to last chapter* Well, off you go young lady - go back and do it! :p Nah, just joking - it's fine.
The chapter really was the third shortest so far, meaning it was the fourth longest out of six... so I don't think that qualifies as very short in comparison to the others. It must have felt that way because there wasn't any Harry/Sev, I suspect. Back to him next chap though, never fear.
You won't find DD bashing here - I'm actually rather a supporter of what he had to do. Not that I felt he got it all right, but that he acted honestly the best way he knew how at the time... can't blame him for that.
Glad I'm still travelling the 'realism path' well... that makes me happy.
Thanks again.
misundersnape...
In response to a challenge: During breakfast Hedwig delivers mail to Snape, much to Harry's confusion. Why is his owl delivering mail to Snape of all people? Challenge by: Jan AQ – “Morning Post”
Takes Place: 6th summer, 6th Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer, 6th Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 7 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 14 Apr 2012 / 28 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Morning Post
Chapters: 7 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 14 Apr 2012 / 28 May 2011
Series: None - Challenges: Morning Post
| Title: Chapter 1: Deliver My Letter Please, Hedwig? | 28 May 2011 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- Please. Please. PLEASE CONTINUE!
This is amazing! I love the shock at the end, so pure! The letter in itself is heart-breaking, and I love how you show Harry's concern for Hedwig. Haha! I love Snape's face!
Do continue!
--Alis Syn
Dobby was right when he said danger awaited Harry at Hogwarts; he was just mistaken on the form it would take.
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
| Title: Chapter 4: More Than One Way to Skin a Cat | 20 Jan 2012 |
| Reviewer: Slythering Potter (Signed) |
- This is really quite an interesting story. It's a little slow at points - especially when you're copying straight from the book. This most recent chapter had a lot of that, and while it's no doubt needed for the storyline it does irk me slightly - probably just because I've read it already XD
I would suggest skipping over those parts? Kinda like you did with the death-day party unless you are changing up the scene. *shrug*
I really like your writing style! And how you go into Snape's head on occasion. I do love his vindictiveness and Harry's reactions to him.
Okay. I have a seriously bad feeling about Jenkins. And then I read the "warnings" again and cringed. Is he luring Harry into a false sense of security? I hope not, I actually kinda liked the guy - except for the alarms going off in my head. If this is going where I think it is... I always imagined Lockhart as the more... dangerous type.
Author's Response: Lockhart does strike one as the more dangerous type. Which in a way makes him not dangerous at all... The most dangerous ones are the ones you don't suspect. Hope that makes sense. And this is the only chapter that has that much taken straight from the book. It just wasn't working no matter how else I tried to write it, and I needed Jenkins to intervene on Harry's behalf, not McGonagall.